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AF: Best Laid Plans
by Danielle J

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Comment by Mr Man on 03/14/01

Its always fun to read an Altered Fates story, and yours was no exception. It was well written, full of transformations, and most importantly, it was entertaining. Keep up the good work on your stories, and thanks for writing!

Comment by Danielle J on 03/12/01

Thinking about it now I didn't write a good ending. Had two endings in my mind I should have used the other one even if it was a unhappy one. Maybe I will go back and write it when I have time.

Comment by Geoff on 03/11/01

I enjoy Altered Fates stories and also ones which are long enough for some characterisation. I need to feel a little sympathy for the main protagonists and care what happens to them.

As you can see your story was right up my street. I enjoyed the problems Stan let himself into both as Leah, and later as Maritza. The little twist at the end was well controlled. I half expected Amy would divorce him, but I didn't quite expect him to end up as Maritza permanantly.

Whilst I did enjoy the plot and the twists and turns you introduced, I felt that Stan wasn't as well drawn as he might have been. Why did he do what he did? How did he square his love for Amy with his lesbian affair with Keiko? What about his mixed attitude to the men s/he met like Barry?

Just a few constructive (I hope) comments. In general, a good story, that could have been great. I enjoyed very much, thanks for the efforts I know you had to make.

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